adventures in penguin island!part1.

One day Mickey and his friends were in rockhoppers ship.Mickey said:do you know that old story of the stowaway?Rocketnuma said:oh yeah i remembered.Then he told the story again and then Andreasmich got the idea of stowing away.Andreasmich said:hey i got an idea lets go hide in rockhoppers ship!and they agreed.while hiding the ship was sailing but rockhopper was actually sending a pil of bananas to penguin island!Chubby said:Mmmm bananas.But then a baby baboon appeared!Chubby and the baby baboon were fighting and speaking monkey!?they shared the bananas after a very nasty paintball fight.Billy said:Hey guys get back here.everybody got in the pile of bananas to grab Chubby.Rockhopper then trowed the bananas to penguin island.Mickey said:Were are we?Rocketnuma said:hmm it must be penguin island.Everybody but rocket said:Penguin island?They explored and found a city on the east of the island.Kittircoks said:Hey visitors and look they brought bananas!Mickey said:who the heck are you?.Kittirocks said:im kittis he is ryzack thats jesse.Mickey interrupted kittirocks and said:ok dont need to tell loads of names.A couple hours later the gang had really fun in the island and there was a posting game there.yup it was a good day but then runescape people invaded the island... to be continued.
Note To jesse ryzack and kittirocks:you three will be added in my stories.

Pile Not Pil
Threw Not trowed

Thanks btw,

When someone is speaking, do this:

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Mickey said:"Do you know that old story of the stowaway?"

And when there is a new senetence, do this:

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While hiding the ship was sailing ,but rockhopper was actually sending a pil of bananas to penguin island!

And when there are new sentences,do this:

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One day Mickey and his friends were in rockhoppers ship. Mickey said...

(Space after period.

Oh and after a new time sequence word, do this:

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One day, Mickey and his friends were in rockhoppers ship.

Um is it me or you are kinda getting bad on writing stoies, No offense.
3/5 5/5-2 (errors)=3/5

ACan you add me in the story?

well kittirocks isnt here so instead of him it will be you daffy.